Today: quiet day...
a day to sit with long dreams.
Hold this boat steady.
Hold this Foolish heart so still.
A quiet day in deep rain.
Drawing - 2.5 x 3.5 inches.
This was from the No. Pencil series I had done the weekend after Christmas, but I forgot to share it.
The poem is my first attempt at a Tanka poem which I first learned from Dan Gurney.
I very much like the syllabic structure: 5 - 7 - 5 - 7 - 7.
The heartfelt place this poem came from was soon covered in laughter (at myself) as I sat here rolling my eyes to the ceiling to think, silently mouthing the words while simultaneously tapping my finger on the edge of the table. Hahahaha! Hope I got it right!
Ahhhh, the sacred and the profane! So deep. So silly. Me.
Oh, how lovely! The pencil drawing is so full of feeling...is there someone near to you who's had open heart surgery?
ReplyDeleteAnd the Tanka: you got it very right. Wonderful! Tanka is such a wonderful form for our time and for our language. Haiku's brevity makes it just a bit too confining for many subjects; Tanka offers the beauty of brevity without the austerity.
first off....crazy good...
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'And the Tanka: you got it very right. Wonderful! Tanka is such a wonderful form for our time and for our language. Haiku's brevity makes it just a bit too confining for many subjects; Tanka offers the beauty of brevity without the austerity.'
now that's something this 'folk -a- billy' would like to try...hmmmpff!
Love the drawing and the poem. I miss "deep rain," here in the dry southwest.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to have to try this Tanka thing; it's been a while.
your emotions dance on the page beautifully
ReplyDeletehello jenny! i love the wavy forms and the wall behind the man and woman. the words - long dreams and hold this boat still - resonate!!!! thanks. steven
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